Eyes

I could see it in your eyes. A little hidden light as it dies. Holding hands, I’m holding you. I’ve decided to see this through. Shining light, die tonight. Fingers gripped so tight. Steely resolve leaves a mystery unsolved. A feeling of satisfaction just right.

-OM

4 thoughts on “Eyes

  1. “A feeling of satisfaction just right”-

    I can’t explain the feeling I get from this piece, but it’s definitely a new one (and isn’t that the goal of all writers! To introduce thoughts and feelings. That’s something new you brought into my life!)

    This line ties up this lovely piece quite nicely. And it also sums up how I feel about the rhythm here: “just right”. Your wording is very sweet, and has a light air to it that makes it seem almost whimsical!

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